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@@ -92,53 +92,49 @@ Thanks in advance for your participation!
 GNU Social Contract [DRAFT]
 --------------------
 
-This document states the core commitments of the GNU Project to the
-broader free software community.  All current GNU Project members
-have agreed to uphold these values.
-
-
-The purpose of the GNU Project is to provide software and systems that
+These are the core commitments of the GNU Project to the broader free
+software community.  The GNU Project provides a software system that
 respect users' freedoms.
 
-# GNU respects users' freedoms
+# The GNU Project respects users' freedoms
 
-We provide software that guarantees to users the four essential freedoms,
-without compromise:
+The GNU Project provides software that guarantees to all users the
+_Four Essential Freedoms_, without compromise:
   0. The freedom to run the program as they wish, for any purpose.
   1. The freedom to study how the program works, and change it so it does
      their computing as they wish.
-     Access to the source code is a precondition for this.
   2. The freedom to redistribute copies so they can help others.
   3. The freedom to distribute copies of their modified versions to others.
-     By doing this they can give the whole community a chance to benefit
-     from their changes.
-     Access to the source code is a precondition for this.
 
-All software written by us is distributed under copyleft licenses, designed
-to ensure that developers cannot strip off users' freedom from GNU software.
+The GNU Project adopts policies that encourage and enable developers
+to actively defend user freedom.  These policies include using
+_copyleft licenses_, designed to ensure that users’ freedoms cannot be
+stripped off, when appropriate.
+
+Besides upholding the Four Essential Freedoms, the GNU Project pays attention
+and responds to new threats to users' freedom as they arise.
+
+
+# The GNU Project provides a consistent system
 
-Besides upholding the four essential freedoms, we pay attention and respond
-to new threats to users' freedom as they arise, such as services as a
-software substitute (SaaSS), use of non-free scripts on web pages, mass
-surveillance, digital restrictions management (DRM), etc.
+The GNU Project develops an operating system, the _GNU System_, as well as
+a set of applications.  Each software component developed by the GNU Project
+is referred to as a _GNU package_.  GNU package developers work together to
+ensure consistency across packages.
 
-# GNU provides consistent systems
 
-We develop an operating system and a set of applications, in the form of
-GNU packages.  GNU package developers work together to ensure consistency
-across packages.  GNU packages follow the design and development guidelines
-of the GNU Project.
+# The GNU Project collaborates with the broader free software community
 
-# GNU collaborates with the broader free software community
+Free software extends beyond the GNU Project, which works with
+companion free software projects that develop key components of the
+GNU System.  The GNU Project aims to extend the reach of free software
+to new fields.
 
-Free software has extended beyond the GNU Project, and we work with
-companion free software projects that develop key components of our system.
-We aim to extend the reach of free software to new fields.
 
-# GNU welcomes contributions from all and everyone
+# The GNU Project welcomes contributions from all and everyone
 
-We want to give everyone the opportunity to contribute to our efforts
-on any of the many tasks that require work.  We welcome all contributors,
-regardless of their gender, ethnicity, sexual orientation, level of
-experience, or any other personal characteristics.  We commit to providing
-a harassment-free experience for all our contributors.
+The GNU Project wants to give everyone the opportunity of contributing to
+its efforts on any of the many tasks that require work.  It welcomes all
+contributors, regardless of their gender, ethnicity, sexual orientation,
+level of experience, or any other personal characteristics.  It commits to
+providing a harassment-free experience for all contributors.